Great news everyone. If you look up top, you will see that the new versions of chapters 1 and 2 are up and available for reading. The first person narration defiantly gives it a different feel. These chapters are shorter than previous ones, and I got rid of the prologue in favor of getting most of the backstory out of the way in the first page and a half. I am very happy with Chapter 1 aside from a few small details. Chapter 2 gives a lot of good information, but I think the dialogue needs some work. Hopefully this will do for now. Be sure to let me know what you all think and enjoy the show.